Intrigue, betrayal, poison! All great ingredients for a murder mystery story, although I sense this will be much more than that. I like the nomenclature you have chosen for your world. Atmospheric, unique world-building and you no doubt will introduce new aspects of the society, culture, and politics in a way that complements the plot and character development in the subsequent chapters.
As for the scar, I would have preferred a show instead of a tell. Here and there the prose could be a bit tighter (e.g. brief moment), and I would reformulate the sentence with the two "just." Feel free to poke me on the TFTD Discord if you want to chat about it some more.
Overall, I think this first chapter successfully creates a sense of anticipation and curiosity.
Intrigue, betrayal, poison! All great ingredients for a murder mystery story, although I sense this will be much more than that. I like the nomenclature you have chosen for your world. Atmospheric, unique world-building and you no doubt will introduce new aspects of the society, culture, and politics in a way that complements the plot and character development in the subsequent chapters.
As for the scar, I would have preferred a show instead of a tell. Here and there the prose could be a bit tighter (e.g. brief moment), and I would reformulate the sentence with the two "just." Feel free to poke me on the TFTD Discord if you want to chat about it some more.
Overall, I think this first chapter successfully creates a sense of anticipation and curiosity.