An atmospheric scene with the bathhouse. We get a bit of insight into the clan society and into the paranoid mind of Yun as well as Usira's curiosity, which may yet turn the moth hunter into the moth, I esp. liked that imagery, it adds depth to the characterisation.
Maybe going forward breakout and focus on one character in either first or third person limited, follow them along and let them take you on a story ride. See where they lead you
An atmospheric scene with the bathhouse. We get a bit of insight into the clan society and into the paranoid mind of Yun as well as Usira's curiosity, which may yet turn the moth hunter into the moth, I esp. liked that imagery, it adds depth to the characterisation.
I liked this particular chapter of the story.
Maybe going forward breakout and focus on one character in either first or third person limited, follow them along and let them take you on a story ride. See where they lead you