An atmospheric scene with the bathhouse. We get a bit of insight into the clan society and into the paranoid mind of Yun as well as Usira's curiosity, which may yet turn the moth hunter into the moth, I esp. liked that imagery, it adds depth to the characterisation.
Maybe going forward breakout and focus on one character in either first or third person limited, follow them along and let them take you on a story ride. See where they lead you
I prefer having at least a bit of a plan of where the story is headed, especially for longer projects... The current plan is to hop back & forth between Usira's & Yun's perspectives because there will likely be a lot of interesting story only one of them will experience. I'm pretty happy with third person limited but I think having two POV characters instead of one will be more fun for this particular story.
An atmospheric scene with the bathhouse. We get a bit of insight into the clan society and into the paranoid mind of Yun as well as Usira's curiosity, which may yet turn the moth hunter into the moth, I esp. liked that imagery, it adds depth to the characterisation.
I liked this particular chapter of the story.
Maybe going forward breakout and focus on one character in either first or third person limited, follow them along and let them take you on a story ride. See where they lead you
Thank you!
I prefer having at least a bit of a plan of where the story is headed, especially for longer projects... The current plan is to hop back & forth between Usira's & Yun's perspectives because there will likely be a lot of interesting story only one of them will experience. I'm pretty happy with third person limited but I think having two POV characters instead of one will be more fun for this particular story.