Requiem of the Moth #2
This builds nicely on the foundation of the first chapter and introduces a magnificently creepy element, the puppet. I like it.
I would change "Can she know" to "Does she know" but that's mere preference.
"In an underground city without trees, amber is more precious than silver or gemstones. A clan envoy, then."
This is very well executed. Such a simple line, but it adds worldbuilding and context in an efficient, clever way.
The Amber Trail
This builds nicely on the foundation of the first chapter and introduces a magnificently creepy element, the puppet. I like it.
I would change "Can she know" to "Does she know" but that's mere preference.
"In an underground city without trees, amber is more precious than silver or gemstones. A clan envoy, then."
This is very well executed. Such a simple line, but it adds worldbuilding and context in an efficient, clever way.